I really enjoyed the first. You nailed the length; there was no more and no less than there should have been. And there is a nice dichotomy between the feelings of guilt in doing anything vaguely sexual that many teenagers have and Integra's own reasons.
Nice job.
And there's a comma splice in the last parenthetical. I'd put a semi-colon there and actually put a question mark in the parentheses...or elipses. But that's me.
I saw the drabbles really more sketches to help define your canon and less artistic pieces--something about the language.
Oh, wait, sorry...you said that basically. My eyes must have skipped over it. I just woke up.
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Date: 2008-07-25 12:21 pm (UTC)Nice job.
And there's a comma splice in the last parenthetical. I'd put a semi-colon there and actually put a question mark in the parentheses...or elipses. But that's me.
I saw the drabbles really more sketches to help define your canon and less artistic pieces--something about the language.
Oh, wait, sorry...you said that basically. My eyes must have skipped over it. I just woke up.
All in all, nice work here.